came with disaster,
destroyed
everything in its path
let loose,
wild rain,
rampage winds,
and waves devouring the crisp golden shore,
like a famished child at lunch,
like a famished child at lunch,
but we were ready,
except some people,
who under estimated,
and now they will see the result,
Sandy
left people
devastated,
alone,
helpless,
in the bitter darkness,
in the bitter darkness,
people are
stranded,
stuck
in a hopeless land,
they need us
and we need them
so lets help,
and we will get help when we need it,
Sandy
I like how you explained the affects of Sandy in this poem. With a little more figurative language, this will be golden!
ReplyDeleteI will try to add some right now!!
ReplyDeleteGood job. The poem is great.
ReplyDeleteReally Nice Amrit. The line breaks were put in the exact right place making it more dramatic. :) Good Job!
ReplyDeleteYou did a good job at describing hurricane Sandy and the people harmed by it.
ReplyDeleteNice job Amrit! Vocabulary could have been improved, figurative language added, and just a little aesthetic changes and this could be top quality. Keep up the good work! (and improving!)
ReplyDeleteI agree with all the comments here! Really nice use of line breaks!
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